I had the good fortune of taking a poetry writing workshop with Dr. David C. Berry in the fall of 1992. During the first meeting of that course, he laid out the first stanza of Jimmy Buffett’s “Margaritaville” on the chalkboard like so:
Nibblin’ on sponge cake
Watching the sun bake
All of those tourists covered with oil,
Strumming my six-string
on my front porch swing,
Smell those shrimp, they’re beginning to boil . . .
Then he explained that the reason “Margaritaville” is fun, and memorable, and popular, is because the stanzas contain an image in every line (and even the chorus has that “lost shaker of salt”). I’ve put the images in bold; he underlined them.
He told us we needed to do only 3 things to get an A in his workshop:
- Turn in a poem per week;
- Give the other poets in the course civil and constructive comments on their work; and
- Include an image in every line until he told us we could break that rule.
I followed the rules because I wanted the A, and I wanted to improve my writing. Sixteen weeks later, the poems I was producing were more mature, more sophisticated, and above all (judging from the feedback) more readable.
If your goal is to give your readers an experience – to transport them, to engage their emotions – give them things to see, hear, feel, taste, and smell.
I am not saying you should use this like a formula for everything you write; but I am saying that if you spend one day a week for a few months focusing specifically on improving the use of sensory images in your work, your writing is sure to improve.
If you already know this trick and see it as basic stuff, I do hope you are sharing it with less-experienced writers. 🙂
(Note – I posted an earlier draft of this 10 days after I started this blog, so almost no one saw it. I think it’s one of the best posts I’ve ever written, and I don’t think I can do any better with the significance of images. The basic principle applies to every form of creative writing. It’s the best single piece of writing advice anyone has ever given me. This one thing took me from novice to journeyman in 16 weeks, and Dr. Berry was one of the greatest teachers I’ve ever had the privilege of studying with. He cared.)
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That’s a great way to look at peotry. Thanks Gene’O!
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You’re welcome. I haven’t done poetry in 15 years or more, but this was such a helpful lesson for me, I had to share it.
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Great post and advice! I always found this aspect of writing quite important, especially as it can be quite a challenge to translate what you experience in your mind into actual words so you can truly share it with the readers.
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Yes. It is a great challenge. Learning to use images helps with the “show, don’t tell” rule.
One of the reasons I find fiction so difficult to write is that I have to play a scene in my head like a movie to get it right. Most other forms of writing are sound-oriented for me, like conversations or speeches. Fiction is visual.
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I am so used to blathering on, I need to start paying attention to actual writing-writing. Good thoughts here, thanks for sharing them!
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You’re welcome, I’m glad you liked.
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That is a great advice for novice writers, and now after reading, makes so much sense! Thanks for sharing, I will definitely try to incorporate it more consciously in my writing!
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I’m glad you think so. I’ve never made so much progress with my writing in so short a time as I did with that first poetry workshop.
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Senses, yes! Well-written and nicely demonstrated, Gene’O. The sense of smell, in particular, is so effective in bringing the reader into the book, yet it’s often overlooked. Too bad; it’s evocative and powerful.
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Thanks! and I totally agree. Scents are powerful.
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This is great advice. Improving is always key. 🙂
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Thanks! I agree. I’ve never known a writer who was so good they couldn’t improve.
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Sorry, I was signed into the admin account for a blog I edit when I left that, and didn’t realize it.
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Hey, wow, there are verses to Margaritaville. The more you know…
Great post!
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haha. Yay! I figured out how to turn on likes for comments just now.
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This is useful. Thanks!
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Your welcome! My Captain America roundup just posted.
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